Wednesday, May 27, 2009

Introduction of ecology

Introduction of ecology

When we think about the ecology the first think we consider about is people. Now days, The ecology is one of the important parts of the life and it studies the life whatever the details .For example ,how people, animals and planet affect together with their environment. Also, the ecology constitutes the main thing to keep our life such as food and different relationship in the habitat. The major points that I will discuss about are firstly, what does the ecological footprints mean. Secondly, how people are judged about environment problems. Finally, what are people actually doing in their real environment
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6 comments:

  1. eimanMay 28, 2009 at 8:33 AM

    the first sentencs is unclear.
    explantion is good ex supprotig detalise etc.
    avoiding words like i will discuss ....etc.
    good work

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  2. Nouf Al HosaniMay 28, 2009 at 8:34 AM

    Hi Fatema
    nice to see your work .
    but you did not define 'ecological footprint' and you did not write a brief summary of the opposing viewpoints that mentioned in the reading..
    good luck

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  3. apaalyMay 28, 2009 at 8:47 AM

    hi ..

    it's a good introduction but it needs more work with the same thing that were mentioned above
    good luck with it ...

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  4. Ayesha-Col 140May 28, 2009 at 8:53 AM

    good morning my friend ,
    the first and second sentence are not clear
    also, you shouldn't write sentence like ''I will discuss this ''

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  5. fatimaMay 30, 2009 at 10:07 PM

    thank you everyone for your comments ifeel happy to see all of these comment .i will edit it

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  6. Jim BuckinghamJune 3, 2009 at 10:06 PM

    Introduction

    What am I looking for?

    A general introduction to the topic which is then followed by a definition of "ecological footprint". This should then lead to your "thesis statement" - a combination of a brief summary of differing points of view on who is responsible for the economy (Schaller and Huber). Then a mention of the need to review what people are doing about the problem.

    How did you do?

    General Introduction

    A good general introduction to the concept of ecology though much too much time is spent on this.

    Definition of "ecological footprint"

    You mention "ecological footprint" as if it is a main topic for your essay. It is not. However, it is an important term to help discuss the problem of environmental damage .. thus the need to "define" it. Your classmates noticed this too. It also helps introduce Schaller and Huber and their very different view about who is responsible.

    Thesis statement
    - brief summary of Schaller and Huber
    - examining what people are doing

    Schaller and Huber are not mentioned and yet they represent the vary differing views on the topic. Please review the writing prompt. You do a great job of introducing the last point of your paper - to discuss what people are actually doing about the problem.

    Other notes

    You have the general idea but please review the points that I have made above.

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